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May 14 2005, 05:33 PM
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bai, eu nu ma pot abtine de la criticat :P
"diamantul se afla incrustat in statuia unei pasari..."
"pasari care se aflau...etc"
mie mi se pare ceva putred aici. ori ai gresit numarul de pasari :P, ceea ce e putin probabil, ori ai gresit modul de exprimare. cred ca ar fi fost mult mai bine spus "pasare care se afla" sau, ca sa mentii continuitatea, "pasari ce se afla... etc"
si ultima problema: eu stiam ca houdini era un om care era maestru in dezlegarea funiilor cu care era legat (si nu numai funii), sau, cel mult, un maestru al disparitiilor misterioase. insa nu un maestru in gasirea celor carora nu li se poate da de urma :P ai inversat rolurile, oarecum... sau n-am inteles eu bine ce ai vrut sa spui.
gata cu criticatul! la urma, laudele: comic-ul e foarte bun, mi-au placut frazele cu "it's not that funny". bestial! astept continuarea!
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