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Hehe, what a beautiful manga. Am citit pe acolo incercari disperate ale lui kaeru de a face lumea sa si citeasca nu numai sa se uite la poze, si sa si comenteze... :D that was fun ^_^
La desenat, ca un nexperimentat care doar citeste, nu pot zice decat ca imi plac la nebunie si ca intr`adevar zici ca sunt facute in Japonia. Daca nu ar fi in romana, nu cred ca ar sti cineva ca sunt facute de cineva din tara noastra. :P
Cat despre story si si mod de scriere... povestea nu lasa de dorit, asa cum am citit pe acolo, doar ca e un subiect mai "utilizat". La inceput exprimarea e cam greoaie, replicile nu curg natural, dar pe parcurs se imbunatateste situatia. Cel putin, mie mi se pare ca adaosul de replici ironice sunt un element foarte bun in desfasurarea unei convorbiri. Si am gasit niste expresii super simpatice ex: 'comoara asta are picioare sau tu habar nu ai unde este?". Ajuta foarte mult. Pe langa expresii, e utila si folosirea unor expresii sau locutiuni care inlocuiesc cuvinte.
Ce am observat este ca scrii foarte frumos cand vine partea e povestire. Citez 'Ati avut vreaodata impresia ca visati cu ochii deschisi? Un astfel de moment traoeste Sepp care vede cu stupoare cum apa se despica si din adancimea oceanului se naste o fiinta". Suna mult mai placut decat dialogul. Acolo mai ai de muncit. Iti recomand Fetele Gilmore daca doresti un exemplu de vorbire fluenta si replici :D
Am gasit si cateva gresheli. Nu gresheli de tipar ci de lib romana ex: @(pag 15) fii- un sg i.Probabil ca poate fi si gresheala de tipar, dar preventiv ;) cate o data- se scrie legat @(pag 20) sorei --> surorii
Si inca un detaliu. Ar fi bine sa explici undeva pe pagina ce isneamna fiecare sfx ex shurp=zgomot de pashi sau ce`o fi.
Si ink ceva :D nu ar fi rau sa delimitezi actiunea pe capitole, si sa pu la fiecare sf de cap un va continua sau cap1 sf etc.
Anyway, manga, daca pot sa ii zic asa, e super, si sper sa nu se adevereasca vorbele unui croat "Pana o termina, o sa fiu batran" si sa apucam finalul destul de curand :P
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