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livia_c12
post Feb 25 2009, 12:49 PM
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sunt incepatoare, dar astept orice fel de critici(poezia mai este postata si pe alte site-uri manga de mine)



Speranta si iertare

Pot eu sa-ti cer iertare?
Cand sufletu-i pustiu,
Privesc pierdut in departare
Spre cerul argintiu.

Atunci te vad, zambind in zare
Cu parul negru-n vant,
-Cufunda-ma-n uitare
Si iarta-mi sufletul plapand!

Speranta-n suflet nu mai am
Sa pot sa cer iertare,
Strabat o strada fara chef
Plimbandu-ma agale.

Dorinta mea-i pierduta-n vant
Si praful o acopera,
Tot ce-am simtit in viata mea
EA imi descopera.

Incerc sa sterg, sa uit pe loc
Dar inima-mi refuza,
Am incuiat in mine tot
Dar sufletul m-acuza.

O lacrima incet coboara
Obrazul ea mi-l taie,
Si-mi lasa mie ca povara
SPERANTA SI IERTARE...
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post Apr 20 2009, 10:16 PM
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e draguta poezia. cted ca ai mai putea compune, ca mie imi plac.
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koneko12
post Apr 21 2009, 01:15 PM
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wow chiar te pricepi si chiar as vrea sa citesc mai multe din poeziile tale :D Cred ca ai lucrat mult la ea...stiu ca mie mi-ar lua cam o luna sa scriu 3 versuri si oricum nu ar iesi la fel de frumoase ca ale tale;)
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post May 5 2009, 09:26 AM
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E o poezie foarte draguta, dar trebuie sa ai grija si la semnele de punctuatie uneori lipsesc, chiar mi-ar placea sa mai citesc poezi de la tine. Apropo pentru o incepatoare poezia e chiar buna. :)
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post May 5 2009, 09:36 AM
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Ok, there's one cool idea there. Forget puffy eyes from last night's crying, how about some deep bloody cuts on your face eh? Doar gandeste-te la cate modele ai putea face in functie de cum stai cand plangi. You can like roll around and get a spiderweb of blood on your face! I bet if you tried really hard you could even draw a cute little heart ^_^ or kittehs! ^^ sau nah... daca vad ca insisti, you can try spelling "speranta si iertare" but that's like emo... :mellow: and hard. noroc ca nu scrii cu diacritice huh?
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livia_c12
post May 17 2009, 11:14 AM
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multumesc pentru comenturi

Soapte din intuneric


In viata asta de rahat
Nu am nimic, nici o dorinta,
Scarbita sunt de tot ce-a insemnat
Intreaga mea fiinta.

Cosmaruri vii, incep sa ma colinde
Si simt cum intunericul ma prinde,
Cu gheare reci si lungi ma trage
La piepu-i rece si ma strange.

Cu soapte-mi penetreaza mintea
Ma invaluie in ceata,
Si ganduri calde imi trimitea
Sa ma intorc la viata.

Sa uit tot ce am suferit
In lumea asta sumbra,
Si pentru cei ce m-au iubit
Sa incetez a fi o umbra.

As vrea sa pot s-ascult ce zice.
As vrea sa il aud cum plange.
Dar trupul meu e inca rece
Si inima se frange....
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post Jul 21 2009, 11:37 AM
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Nu am mai trecut de mult pe aici, si tu ai postat de mult poezia, dar sti cum se zice mai bine mai tarziu decat niciodata.
Imi place mult poezia, are fluidiatate, iar ideea pe care o conturezi e pe intelesul tuturor, ce sa mai zic e foarte frumoasa si foarte profunda.
Ca un mic sfat, daca scri o poezie cu rima, ceea ce poezia ta are, inca una frumoasa, trebuie sa aiba si o masura cat mai apropiata, aici mai ai de lucrat. Succes in continuare :D
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post Jul 21 2009, 11:56 AM
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mda. eu m-am oprit la primul vers. :P
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